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The number of advertisements for charities on television and the internet seems to be increasing. What is causing this ? Is this a positive or negative development ? Give reasons for your answer & include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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The donations have been increasing through media and social media. The main element of advertising is a plethora of poor countries in the world.
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in
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people
's lives better.
However
, the basic needs can
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 by the money for the pupils.
Besides
this
, it can
also
 help to secure the community.
This
 essay will elaborate on both perspectives in the upcoming paragraphs. A number of philanthropists
are
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collect the funds and distribute
to
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the
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needy
people
. They protect their lives
as well as
 give
essential
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 necessities.
Therefore
, they make some
fund raising
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 programs and
encourages
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to
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the nation.
Furthermore
, they collaborate with various brands to help them in education for children, so they can build education
centers
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 and grant them.
Moreover
, they attract society for advertisement through social platforms and print media to support poor
one's
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.
Consequently
, they aid from different forums for the purpose
to develop
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 the poor society. Apart from that, there are
such
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who
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 have been looting
people
 in the name of charity. Those schemes are involved in wealth gathered for
self interest
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. Despite of, the charity trust
has
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 not accountable for ingoing and outgoing cash so most
people
 avoid
to
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the funds. Not only the trust issues but
also
 no law forum to control the assets of the trust.
Therefore
, the negative aspect of
the
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charity schemes may not
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favorable
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 to
the
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society.
To conclude
,
the
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donation
is
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 a significant role in the public and motivates
of
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people
 to
grant helping
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people
. But it has
negative
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 impact
more
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rather than
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 that there is no check and balance for currency so it should make a law to enforce the transparency of the assets.
Then
 everyone can freely support
to
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the helping nations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nonprofit organization
  • crowdfunding
  • philanthropy
  • altruism
  • donor fatigue
  • corporate social responsibility
  • social media influence
  • charitable giving
  • sponsorship
  • transparency
  • accountability
  • awareness campaign
  • digital marketing
  • emotional appeal
  • fundraising
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