Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Obviously,
children
's obesity
is a huge problem in many countries today. Consequently
, many people can think that this
problem should be the government
responsibility. But, in my opinion, it is not true, we can not deny Change noun form
government's
parents
responsibility for their children
's health.
When the children
are very small, they more depend on their parents
. Admittedly, food
and activities
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activity
habbits
are created Correct your spelling
habits
in
a very young age, at Change preposition
at
age
when Add an article
an age
the age
children
are more close
to their Replace the words
closer
parents
.
Therefore
, the main reason which can support my opinion is that only parents
can decide how to orginize
Correct your spelling
organise
children
's life includinhg
their activities.
Even if the Correct your spelling
including
government
provide a variety of activities, but parents
don't
use these options and won't
involve their children
in them, it does not matter how much effort a government
will take.
Besides
, the other cause why only parents
responsible
for their Add a missing verb
are responsible
children
's obesity
due
to Add a missing verb
is due
children
's meal
.
Of course, many people could say that a Fix the agreement mistake
meals
government
can organize education in nutricion
, Correct your spelling
nutrition
Correct word choice
and health
health
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healthy
food
propagation, but if children
's parents
preffered
junk Correct your spelling
prefer
food
they will teach their children
to eat it too. Finally
they can ruin Add a comma
Finally,
children
's health at a very young age and be
Unnecessary verb
apply
a
cause Correct article usage
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
children's
Change noun form
children
obesity
.
We can see some families where all of the family members have an obesity
, they eat much, they like junk food
, they don't
like an
active games or Correct article usage
apply
sport
.
In conclusion, the point I want to make is Fix the agreement mistake
sports
this
: our life and our cjhildren's
Correct your spelling
children's
life
are our responsibility, and we don'Fix the agreement mistake
lives
t
need blame
Fix the infinitive
to blame
government
that we were lazy and Correct article usage
the government
have
Wrong verb form
having
a
bad Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
food
habits.
For the requirements gathering sessions
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sessions,
SME
from every respective department must be involved. As Fix the agreement mistake
SMEs
this
project is internal for EPAM, sharing knowledge must be easier and more flexible, so I would just search for possible experts in the discovery preparation phase and invite them or their trusted delegates. Thus
, the main focus would be on actually working on deliverables.
we should invite somebody who is responcible
for the budget.Correct your spelling
responsible
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