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Some school leavers go traveling or work for a period of time instead of going directly to university. Do you think this has more advantages or disadvantages in their study?

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Nowadays, it is common for pupils to have a break directly after graduating from secondary
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 to travel or work.
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 will lead to both advantages and disadvantages, I believe that there will be several positives and drawbacks in both cases. On one side of that argument, having a gap
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 for
traveling
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 benefits
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 in learning new languages and discovering different cultures,
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 many
students
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 work during
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 period to become more independent and have a source of income, Most
students
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 decide to have a job immediately after finishing high
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, Travelling is a way to relax from the stresses of full-time education,
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 it develops their social skills,
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, foreigners they meet from different cultures
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 they will learn new languages,
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, my friend Sara after graduating she took two years breathing space and
traveled
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 to China now she is a fluent Chinese speaker.
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, the disadvantages of both cases perhaps make people not interested in continuing their education,
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 they are a
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 behind their high
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 friends and have forgotten the lessons they learned, and
students
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 returning from a break find it very difficult to adjust to university life and starting a course after a
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's break is back-breaking, Most of the
school
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 leavers forget what they studied or how to study at all, namely in my university there are number of
students
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 the administration imposed a preparatory
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 on them because they forgot what they learned in secondary
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 and the cause of
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 clean forget was the gap
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.
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, taking a break from studies can be advantageous if it permits people to learn more about the world and new languages, Though they should be careful that it doesn't affect their learning journey.

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