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Your friend has been offered a place on a course at the university where you studied. He/She would like your advice about finding a place to live. Write an email to your friend. In your email, describe where you lived when you were a student at the universityrecommend the best way for him/her to look for accommodationwarn him/her of mistakes students make when choosing accommodation

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Dear Rose, Hope you are doing well. I'm so glad
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of
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 you. I received your email and found out that you're searching to find a suitable accommodation. When I was a student there, I used to stay in buildings that
were belongs
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belonged
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 to
university
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the university
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. They
werrn't
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weren't
 that convenient, but affordable. A number of my friends used to stay
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apartments
thet
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that
 they rented out of
university
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the university
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 yard. But, I'm afraid, I don't have enough information
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.
Fourtunately
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Fortunately
 we have groups on telegram and what's
app
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, I can add you if you like, and you can make friends there and, ask your questions.
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 www.accommodation.com website can be useful. Oh, one more thing, there are a number of real states close to
university
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universities
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thet
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that
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low quality
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 accommodations
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 an expensive price and persuade you to rent. Be careful not to trust them absolutely. Take care of yourself, Good luck Best wishes, Faranak
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