The chart shows the proportion of working-age adults in four countries from 1960 to 2050 predicted.

The chart shows the

 proportion of working-age adults in four countries from 1960 to 2050 predicted.
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The figure illustrates the percentage of the
overall
working-age adult population in four countries (
France
, United States, Japan, Germany) from 1960 to 2050.
Overall
, all four countries are forecasted to
decrease
in 2050. At the start of the period, Germany and Japan were in the first and second places, respectively.
In contrast
,
France
and the United States occupied the
last
two positions, but
France
was 3
percent
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higher.
However
, in the future, they are all predicted to
decrease
. In 1960, the percentage of the working-age population in Japan was 65%.
Then
it showed a steep rise and reached its peak at 70% in 1990, after which it fell dramatically and is predicted to continue
this
trend. As for Germany, which was at the top in 1960, it showed a
decrease
by 1970, followed by an increase and reaching its highest point in 1990.
However
, the graph shows a steady
decrease
that will continue.
France
, which was third in the ranking, demonstrated an increase but is predicted to fall in the future and will occupy the second position. Regarding the data shown for the United States, it is similar to
France
, but it will occupy the first place
at the end
of the predicted period.
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