The chart shows the proportion of working-age adults in four countries from 1960 to 2050 predicted.

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The figure illustrates the percentage of the

overall

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working-age adult population in four countries (

France

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, United States, Japan, Germany) from 1960 to 2050.

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, all four countries are forecasted to

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in 2050. At the start of the period, Germany and Japan were in the first and second places, respectively.

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France

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and the United States occupied the

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two positions, but

France

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was 3

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per cent

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higher.

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, in the future, they are all predicted to

decrease

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. In 1960, the percentage of the working-age population in Japan was 65%.

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it showed a steep rise and reached its peak at 70% in 1990, after which it fell dramatically and is predicted to continue

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trend. As for Germany, which was at the top in 1960, it showed a

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by 1970, followed by an increase and reaching its highest point in 1990.

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, the graph shows a steady

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that will continue.

France

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, which was third in the ranking, demonstrated an increase but is predicted to fall in the future and will occupy the second position. Regarding the data shown for the United States, it is similar to

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, but it will occupy the first place

at the end

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of the predicted period.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

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