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Some people say that now is the best time in history to be living. What is your opinion about this? What other time in history would be interesting to live in? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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As far as I'm concerned,
life
 is a unique opportunity
has
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that has
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 been presented to mankind and, It couldn't be replaced by any other thing. During the centuries human
being
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life
 has changed step by step. These changes were so considerable
so
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that some
people
 believe
todays
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today
are
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 the best period of time for living. I must state that I agree with the concept to some extent. These days, thanks to astonishing advances in technology, there are rocketing changes in
life
.
People
 can communicate from
for example
 US,
Canada
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and Canada
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 to China, Japan,
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and india
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india
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India
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for
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 ease, In fact world has been converted
to
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into
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 a global village. Another point can
be transfer
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 from
a
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one
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 country to another
one
, it was struggling to travel
for instance
 from England to
US
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the US
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 by
ships
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ship
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 a few decades ago,
while
 in favour of modern
aircrafts
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, almost everybody can have a fast flight and land in
US
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the US
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 in
just
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the just
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 a few hours.
One
 of the most
distaggering
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staggering
 facilities we can use these days is social media
such
 as
instagram
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Instagram
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what's
app
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an app
the app
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, you tube-
every
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everyone
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one
 can declare his/ her own thoughts and ideas freely,
connect
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and connect
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 with other
people
 easily,
while
 it wasn't possible even in
last
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the last
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 century. Despite
of
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the
above mentioned
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 issues, in my point of view, there were
another
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other
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 interesting sections in
life
.
I
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I am
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personally interested in the period of history
that
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the
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 Hakhamanesh dynasty used to live,
one
 the most attractive time in Iran
that
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when
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 there were
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a lots
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lots
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lot
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 of strength, facilities, safety,
fairness
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and fairness
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 in my country.
People
 used to live in freedom and based on their own
believes
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 and, there was no obligation for them. In conclusion, there are
gorgous
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gorgeous
 facilities and advances in
todays
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today's
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life
, and all of them can make it more convenient and attractive to live, but
life
 has been a miracle from the creation of
human
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humans
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 to date.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unprecedented
  • prosperity
  • technological advancements
  • global connectivity
  • longevity
  • opportunities
  • self-expression
  • renaissance
  • exploration
  • industrial revolution
  • roaring twenties
  • unparalleled
  • groundbreaking
  • transformative
  • revolutionary
  • epoch-making
  • flourished
  • transcended
  • innovations
  • distinguished
  • renaissance artists
  • explorers
  • innovative entrepreneurs
  • exhilarating
  • era
  • unforgettable
  • boom
  • vibrant
  • exuberant
  • transformed
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