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(2016) It is not necessary for people to travel abroad to learn about other countries. We can learn it from bokks, films and the Internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #travel #countries #bokks #films #internet
‏To a certain extent, I agree that education is an important thing in a person's life with Passion but, I
also
 believe when people start living with different cultures they will learn
moreover
 than watching a film or listening to a radio program. ‏The difference between countries
such
 as the United States and Australia, Canada is very far and it costs more to get there, travel is expensive
however
 it can take a chance to learn more from internet strategies and upload applications. Enter groups to talk about your country and customs, or ask about the customs of people participating in the groups.
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watching historical films They explain wars and the establishment of the state, The unification of peoples, the elimination of global famines and certainly languages, and the reconciliation of countries. ‏The community is a good way to learn about their citizens and make a list of questions to ask them, I would suggest writing down all the information to summarise it ‏Cruise ships will be a nice and easier way to take a vacation and see distant countries like Spain and Italy, Austria. Italy is a very big city with a history
such
 as Roma. ‏Spain has many oldest books about The largest civilization that settled in Spain is called Andalusia. There are many palaces, ancient walls, and ancient inscriptions, and it is a permanent place for visitors who love to learn about cultures. ‏In conclusion,
although
 the main reason to travel is to collect information from other people who live in different parts of the world.
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