TASK 1 : 150 WORDS Your friend had made a plan for you to see a movie together but you cannot now not join him. You've found another friend who can go instead of you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Explain why you cannot go anymore Say who can go instead of you Say why this person is a good person to go with

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Dear Daj, I hope

this

letter finds you well. I am writing

this

letter to tell you about a change in our plan for watching “Something in the

rain

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” together that we

have

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planned a few days ago. I am incredibly sorry for being unable to watch the movie with you

this

weekend. I have been requested to travel to China for work and meeting with a team for 10 Days, and I will leave Thailand

this

Friday. As you know I am a huge fan of Korean movies, and you can imagine how sad I am. By the way, I have Ann, our ex-university student, who is extremely into Korean movies as well. She has

also

told me that she needs to watch

this

Korean movie too, but she couldn’t purchase a ticket

due to

the limited

ticket

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. I have contacted her, she is excited to watch the movie with you

instead

of me. I am pretty sure Ann is a wonderful mate to watch

this

film with you as she has watched

this

series at least twice.

Moreover

, when you have any confusion

due to

the storyline being related to the previous film series, she can explain those to you without effort. Please tell me your opinion. I am waiting for your reply. Best wishes, Gibsy.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

218 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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