Some people fear that technology is gradually taking over control of our lives, while others think that it has led to many positive developments in all aspects of their lives. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays new technologies are a crucial part of our
lives
. Some
people
argue that technological advancement has changed their
lives
positively, at the same
time
others feel that technology has started to control their
lives
. In
this
essay, I will overview both opinions and give my own in the conclusion.
To begin
with, technological developments help to make
people
's
lives
easier. Currently, it is hard to realise our
lives
without computers and smartphones .
For example
, three or four decades earlier
people
couldn't imagine communicating with
people
from different countries would be so easy , but for modern
people
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people,
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it is nothing special.
Also
,
invention
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the invention
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of home gadgets helps housewife save their
time
and energy and spend
this
time
for self-treatment.
On the other hand
, some
people
still have an opinion that new technologies have a negative influence on our
lifestyleand
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lifestyle and
lifestyle
,
moreover
, control it.
This
is because today more and more individuals, especially youngsters, spend their
time
online , rather than communicating in real life. The population are influenced by the information they see or read on social media . Some items , like washing machines or vacuum cleaners are now vital. Individuals become addicted to technology. In conclusion,
although
people
today
became
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dependent on some technological items, my opinion is that there are more positive aspects , like convenience and
time
-saving, than negative. With technological
advancement
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advancement,
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our
live
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became
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have become
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easier in many
ytimes
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times
. It is a personal choice of everyone , to use gadgets to make our life easier
,
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or be controlled or addicted.
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task response
Address both opinions clearly and provide a balanced perspective. Ensure that the main points flow logically and are well-supported with examples.
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