The chart below shows information about different species of birds observed in Woodchuck county at different times of the year.

The chart below shows information about different species of birds observed in Woodchuck county at different times of the year.
The chart illustrates relevant data about eight individual species of birds seen in Woodchuck
county
Capitalize word
County
show examples
during different times of the year
especifically
Correct your spelling
specifically
winter
and
summer
.
Overall
,
Summer
is the time in which most of the types of birds can be seen which differs from
winter
with just four species seen.
In addition
to
this
, 3 types of birds which are cardinals, crows and woodpeckers appear to be seen
on
Change preposition
in
show examples
both
winter
and
summer
. The graph
also
shows that bluebirds, mockingbirds, orioles,
vireos
Correct word choice
and vireos
show examples
showed themselves to the public only in
Summer
in comparison to
winter
in which only juncos seem to appear in the County.
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