The graph and chart below give information about species extinctions and the treats to plant life. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and chart below give information about species extinctions and the treats to plant life.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph and chart show information about natural events impacting plant life in tropical
forest
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forests
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and
extinctions
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the extinctions
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of plant and animal species in tropical
forest
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forests
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between 2000 and 2100.
Overall
, it is predicted in the future that the extinction number will reach
the
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a
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peak;
however
,it will go down
at the end
of the period caused
by
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of
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human impact and natural events.
According to
the first data, the extinction number was about 500 million in 2000 and the numbers kept increasing and predicted in the next 60 years will be 50,000.
On the other hand
, the prediction numbers
then
plummeted which is estimated
at the end
of the period will be in the vicinity of 29,000.
Furthermore
, based on the reason for the extinction of the plant's life, human impact is the highest threat for them which is calculated by
81,3
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81.3
%
whereas
agriculture and harvesting is the prominent effect for the threats (31.1%). Meanwhile, the effect of natural events
such
as natural disasters just
count
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by 18.7%.
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