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Nowadays anyone can post news on the internet. As a result, we cannot trust information we read there. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#anyone #post #news #internet #trust #information
Most
people
believed
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believe
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 that the
Internet
 has great access for
people
 to build
connection
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connections
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 but the
other
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others
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 think that it may not be an accurate site to find
information
. I do believe that
people
 can maintain their communication within the
internet
 despite its shortcomings.
Internet
provided
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provides
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 the social media that
people
 use
on
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in
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 their daily life
for
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to
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 communicate with others. It is easy access for all
people
moreover
 it is user-friendly.
People
 can talk to their friends and family just within
second
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a second
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. It can
also
 connect
people
 around the world virtually.
For instance
, many
professor
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professors
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 are now doing a virtual course so the
student
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students
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 do not have to attend their classes physically.
This
 can cause time efficiency and the student can have additional time to do other things,
lets
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let's
let us
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 say homework or
practical
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a practical
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 job.
On the other hand
,
people
is
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apply
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often
mistaken
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mistake
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 the
information
 they
got
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get
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 from the
internet
.
This
 is mostly
because
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because of
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 the lack of accuracy of the
information
. False
information
 is usually spread on the
internet
 to cause fear.
For example
,
people
that
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who
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used
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use
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internet
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the internet
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 for fraud. They used
others
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others'
other's
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 data to steal
people
’s money.
This
is
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apply
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could be the main reason why
people
 do not totally trust the
Internet
. Both views are
debateable
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debatable
, but in my opinion, the
Internet
 has so many
benefit
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benefits
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 it can offer. We can reduce the shortcomings that come after the usage of the
Internet
.
People
 can start to use the
Internet
 more wisely and avoid false
information
 by
double checking
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double-checking
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 the truth behind the
information
 they have got.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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