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WRITING TASK 2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. The use of mobile phone is as antisocial as smoking. Smoking is banned in certain places so mobile phone should be banned like smoking. To what extend do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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Using mobile
phones
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also
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is also
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 not
socially
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as socially
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 friendly as smoking.
Therefore
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 mobile
phones
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also
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 should be
banded
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banned
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 in certain locations as the prohibition of smoking . The modern society runs fast with the modern technology. All the generations after
millanials
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millennials
Millenials
 are connected with
there
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their
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mobiles
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mobile
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phones
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. They use
mobiles
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mobile
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phones
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 to order food, to contact someone, to use
gps
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GPS
 and many more. Simply handphones
has
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have
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 connected to
there
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their
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life styles
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lifestyles
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. And people
gets
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get
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 a lot of
benifites
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benefits
 from their mobile
phones
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. But smoking
dose
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does
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 not have any
benifit
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benefit
benefits
 to
a
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apply
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human life. It
couses
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causes
lunge
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lung
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 cancer, Azma and many other bad diseases. Even a
non smoker
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non-smoker
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 can cause
these sikness
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this sikness
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 by staying around a smoker.
Therefore
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 smoking should be band from all
the
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apply
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public areas but by
concidering
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considering
 the
benifits
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benefits
 that we
gets
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get
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 from a mobile phone, the government can not prohibit mobile
phones
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 even in certain places. But the
austhorities
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authorities
 can make some rules and conditions
such
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 as to turn
off
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apply
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the sound and
trun
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turn
 off the wifi or
els
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else
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 turning
of
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off
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 the mobile phone which is only will relevant in special places. As the
cunclusion
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conclusion
 smoking should be prohibited from almost all the public areas since it's
cousing
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causing
 many health issues and mobile
phones
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 are not
anti social
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anti-social
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 Because of the
benifits
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benefits
 that people
gets
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get
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.
Genarally
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Generally
 mobile
phones
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 are socially friendly
object
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objects
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 which can get lots of
benifits
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benefits
.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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