WRITING TASK 2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. The use of mobile phone is as antisocial as smoking. Smoking is banned in certain places so mobile phone should be banned like smoking. To what extend do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

Using mobile
phones
also
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is also
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not
socially
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as socially
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friendly as smoking.
Therefore
mobile
phones
also
should be
banded
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banned
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in certain locations as the prohibition of smoking . The modern society runs fast with the modern technology. All the generations after
millanials
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millennials
Millenials
are connected with
there
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their
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mobiles
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mobile
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phones
. They use
mobiles
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mobile
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phones
to order food, to contact someone, to use
gps
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GPS
and many more. Simply handphones
has
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have
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connected to
there
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their
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life styles
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lifestyles
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. And people
gets
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get
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a lot of
benifites
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benefits
from their mobile
phones
. But smoking
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does
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not have any
benifit
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benefit
benefits
to
a
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human life. It
couses
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causes
lunge
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lung
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cancer, Azma and many other bad diseases. Even a
non smoker
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non-smoker
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can cause
these sikness
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by staying around a smoker.
Therefore
smoking should be band from all
the
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apply
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public areas but by
concidering
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considering
the
benifits
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benefits
that we
gets
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get
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from a mobile phone, the government can not prohibit mobile
phones
even in certain places. But the
austhorities
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authorities
can make some rules and conditions
such
as to turn
off
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the sound and
trun
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turn
off the wifi or
els
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else
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turning
of
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off
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the mobile phone which is only will relevant in special places. As the
cunclusion
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conclusion
smoking should be prohibited from almost all the public areas since it's
cousing
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causing
many health issues and mobile
phones
are not
anti social
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anti-social
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Because of the
benifits
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benefits
that people
gets
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get
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.
Genarally
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Generally
mobile
phones
are socially friendly
object
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objects
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which can get lots of
benifits
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benefits
.
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