the diagrams below show the riverpark area of 20 years ago and the riverpark area now

the diagrams below show the riverpark area of 20 years ago and the riverpark area now
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The presented
map
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gives information about the alteration of the
river
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park in the two different periods times. From an
overall
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perspective,
it is clear that
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significant changes have happened from the past to now. So, numerous buildings have been built on the mentioned site for 20 years. As observed in the details,
while
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the one street and railway tracks shown in the
river
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park diagram in the past, a lot of buildings have been established here in the new
map
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, which includes a supermarket, shops, a college, a post office and birdhouse. As shown in the new
map
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, a college, post office and supermarket have been created at the cross of the
river
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, as well a library and doctor building have been made next to the post office in the centre of the
map
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. The birdhouse is remarkable in the new
river
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park.
According to
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two diagrams, railway tracks have been remind without changes. In the before
map
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, there was a street,
while
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many streets have been created in the newer
map
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words map, river with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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