The diagram below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two diagrams illustrate the
cement
production process and its usage to produce concrete for the building process. Use synonyms
Overall
, the Linking Words
cement
-making process involves four stages, including crushing, mixing, heating, and grinding. Following that, Use synonyms
cement
will be required to produce concrete.
Use synonyms
Firstly
, limestone and clay were inserted into a crusher to combine and form them into powder. After that, the powder will be mixed in a clinker prior to being heated in a rotating heater. Shortly after, the rotating heater will clink the materials before being ground and forming Linking Words
cement
. The end product, Use synonyms
cement
, will be packed into bags for distribution or used Use synonyms
further
to produce concrete.
In order to Linking Words
functioned
fully in Change the verb
function
building
, concrete will be made from a combination of 15% Correct article usage
the building
cement
, 10% water, 25% sand, and 50% gravel. The materials will be mixed in a spinning concrete mixer. Use synonyms
Finally
, the mixture will result in Linking Words
a concrete
, which Remove the article
concrete
a block of concrete
a hunk of concrete
Linking Words
further
used for building purposes.Add a missing verb
is further
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