The graph below gives information about cinema attendance in Australia between 1990 and the present, with projections to 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about cinema attendance in Australia between 1990 and the present, with projections to 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the changes in cinema
attendance
rates among different
age
groups
in Australia from 1990 to 2010.
Overall
, cinema
attendance
increased across most
age
groups
over the period, except for the 25-34
age
group
, which saw a decline by the end of the period. Notably, the 14-24
age
group
consistently led in
attendance
rates. In 1990, the 14-24
age
group
had the highest
attendance
at 90%, significantly higher than the 50+
age
group
, which was at 40%. Between 1990 and 1998,
attendance
among the 14-24
group
experienced a slight dip, dropping to 88% in 1992 before gradually increasing to 95% by 1998.
This
group
remained steady
around
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90% for the following decade,
then
reached 95% again in 2010. The
attendance
rate for the 50+
age
group
fluctuated but showed an
overall
rise, reaching 60% by 2010, though it remained consistently lower than younger
age
groups
.
In contrast
, both the 25-34 and 35-49
age
groups
started at similar levels, each at 60% in 1990.
While
the 25-34
group
saw a steady increase to 80% by 2000, it remained unchanged until 2006,
then
dropped to 70% in 2010. The 35-49
age
group
,
however
, rose sharply, peaking at 85% in 2006 before experiencing a slight decline by 2010, though it remained above its initial level in 1990. In summary, cinema
attendance
rose for all
age
groups
except 25-34, with the 14-24
age
group
consistently showing the highest rates throughout the period.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words attendance, age, groups, group with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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