The graph below gives information about cinema attendance in Australia between 1990 and the present, with projections to 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart above illustrates the
percentage
of people
in each age group
attending the cinema
at least one time a year
. It could be clearly seen that all the age groups except 25-34 years old have
a slight increase in Wrong verb form
had
cinema
attendance between 1990 and 2010. Teenagers and young adults account for the largest percentage
of people
spending time on
Change preposition
in
cinema
Correct article usage
the cinema
while
the group
50+ years old has the lowest .
In 1990, 90% of the adolescence
and young adults Replace the word
adolescents
group
were cinema
’s audience, while
in the same year
, only 40% of the old people
came to the cinema
. The younger group
first had an increasing trend and then
kept the percentage
stable for a 10
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10-year
year
period before a slight increase to nearly 100% in 2010. In contrast
, over the 20
Add a hyphen
20-year
year
period, the percentage
in the older group
slightly increased from 40% to 60%.
About the two middle group
ages, they all start from 60% in 2008. Both groups had an increasing trend until in 2006, the percentage
of working people
started to decline. In 2010, the middle age group
ended up at above 80% while
the other group
finished at about 70%.Submitted by cathyngo1512 on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, people, group, cinema, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.
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