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Some people think that you can never become fluent in a language unless you have spent time living or working in that country. To what extent do you agree?

#people #language #time #country
It is believed by some
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 that in order to become proficient in some specific
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language
, one has to have practical knowledge by spending in
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. I strongly agree with
this
 statement. Because staying
in
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 environment not only gives exposure to
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empirical
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experiences
experience
 but
also
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 off the loopholes
while
 learning. As we know practice makes the man perfect. We can put endless efforts
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 any
language
, but we will always not become perfect
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 unless we do not get exposure
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 practical knowledge.
Moreover
,
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experince
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experience
 provides
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enormous
numerous
 opportunities in order to work on loopholes and
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 of improvements . Mistakes can never be improved if they are not implemented well and
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 can only be executed if one gets the required
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surrounding
surroundings
. For
an
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example, seeds can not
get
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 if
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gardening
will
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 not
be
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done on
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Furthermore
, in order to learn
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, a relevant environment brings
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different
 opportunities. Staying
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around
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same
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laguage
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language
 will make the person
comfertable
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comfortable
 than practicing
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diffrent laguage
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different languages
 with different people. The person will not feel nervous
while
 having a conversation with people who
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same
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language
.It
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eradicates
educates
 the
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hesitation
 and boosts one's confidence. The person will
eventuily
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eventually
 become more confident talking to them on
regular
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, If a new
language
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then
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experience
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vital
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 all the practice can go
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