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The chart below shows how much money is spent in the budget on different sectors by the UAE government in 2000.

The chart below shows how much money is spent in the budget on different sectors by the UAE government in 2000.
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The chart compares the proportion of income that the UAE government spent on ten various divisions in 2000.
Overall
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, it's clear that social security expense was by far the most in these parts
while
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 the chart shows the lowest amount that was spent was related to transport. the pie chart witnessed Social Security at 100
billion
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 AED
as well as
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 health and Personal Social Services at 53
billion
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 AED were the highest expenditure
however
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 Transport at 9
billion
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 AED, Industry,Agriculture and Employment at 13
billion
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 AED had the lowest proportion
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of
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the government. The table shows that in six other
sectors
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sectors,
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 the UAE government allocated middle budgets.Figures show education had the highest spending 38
billion
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 AED in comparison with five other parts Debt Interest well as Other expenditures 23
billion
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 AED and Defence 22
billion
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 AED were the next incomes.Numbers illustrate the expenditure related to Law and Order was 17
billion
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 AED.Housing,Heritage and Entertainment had 15
billion
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 AED payments.

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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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