The chart below gives information about how families on one country spent their weekly income 1968 and in 2018

The chart below gives information about how families on one country spent their weekly income 1968 and in 2018
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The bar chart depicts the spending of families' weekly revenues in one country compared
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1960 and
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2018.
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,in most cases, people wasted their money on food or leisure in different years among 8 families’ expenses.
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, outlays for home goods were the same for both years. On the one hand, the biggest expenses of families were on meals in 1968, accounting for 35% of weekly income,
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costs of eating were approximately 17% in 2018. Compared to 1968, an enormous amount of money was spent on spare-time activities, accounting for about 22% of weekly revenue in 2018,
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outlays for leisure activities were 8% of 7 days income in 2018.
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, the remaining costs were on housing, fuel power, clothing and footwear, personal goods, and transport. In 1968, the amount of money on housing, fuel, clothing and footwear,
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on personal goods was more than in 2018,
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the costs of remaining activities were more than in 2018.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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