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The chart below shows information about different species of birds observed in Woodchuck county at different times of the year.

The chart below shows information about different species of birds observed in Woodchuck county at different times of the year.
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The table gives information about the observation of eight groups of
birds
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 living in
Woodchuck
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 County in the winter and the summer.
Overall
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,
while
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 almost
species
Correct determiner usage
all species
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 of
birds
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 show up in
Woodchuck
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 County in the hot season, only four of them move to
this
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 location in the winter.
Also
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, three bird types stay here in both seasons. Seven out of eight bird species fly to
Woodchuck
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 County in the summer, which are bluebirds, cardinals, crows, mockingbirds, orioles, vireos and woodpeckers.
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, only half of them choose to live here in the winter. To be specified, there are three species observed in both seasons, which are cardinals, crows, and woodpeckers.
Otherwise
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, bluebirds,
mocking
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mockingbirds
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birds
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, orioles, and vireos are the four groups that can only be seen in the summer. Notably, juncos are the only
birds
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 that
just
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apply
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live in
Woodchuck
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 in the cold weather.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words birds, woodchuck with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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