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The best way to prevent people from smoking is to impose high taxes on tobacco products. In this way, people will be less likely to develop a long-term addiction to smoking. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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At the present moment, the
number
 of
people
 who
smoke
 increased significantly. One said the best way to anticipate
this
 issue is to
give
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pay
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 high taxes on tobacco products. In my opinion,
this
 is the right thing to do since it can reduce the
number
 of
people
 who
smoke
. Nowadays, it can be found that many tobacco products are still at a low price and
this
 means society can consume them at their pleasure. By putting high taxes on the product, some class will rethink their decision since it has a high price.
For instance
, lower
middle class
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middle-class
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 consumers will not purchase any cigarette
due to
 the fact of raised
charge
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charges
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. Giving a huge tariff on cigarettes, not only be a problem
to
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for
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 these
people
 but
also
young
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for young
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 buyers seeing it will be a financial burden for their parents. If they keep consuming,
therefore
, they can not survive with their main expenses.
Moreover
, the cut will
be affected
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 the availability of the products so fewer clients will buy them.
On the other hand
, individuals in upper middle income may still have the potency to continue smoking despite high taxes. Considering the fact that they already have a stable income, they can enjoy the product as a recreation good.
This
 means some
people
 will continue to
smoke
 effortlessly
due to
 the reason that they can afford it easily.
Although
, it will still
decreased
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 the
number
 of
people
 who
smoke
.
To conclude
, raising the tax on tobacco potentially decreases the
number
 of
people
 who
smoke
although
 some may still continue smoking.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • impose high taxes
  • tobacco products
  • prevent
  • people
  • smoking
  • long-term addiction
  • less likely
  • develop
  • discourage
  • affordable
  • reduce
  • availability
  • market
  • financial burden
  • deter
  • young people
  • start
  • generate revenue
  • government
  • invest
  • anti-smoking campaigns
  • healthcare services
  • continue
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