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Some schools start teaching a foreign language in primary school years. Do the advantages of teaching foreign languages to young children outweigh its disadvantages?

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foreign
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Therefore
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modern parents tend to teach few
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schools
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schools
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village
schools
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teachers
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schools
. They will not have a chance to study foreign
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Schools
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 and it will be easy for them to work in
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 world and for their highest studies as well. I would
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age
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

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