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The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. ,1191ummarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. ,1191ummarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The table provides
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 about the underground railways system in London and five other cities.
Overall
,
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London has the longest route of underground
railway
 systems
whereas
 the highest number of
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passenger
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passengers
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 per year in
milliions
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millions
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Tokyo. The
kyoto
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Kyoto
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 and Los
Anglese
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Angeles
 carried
approximately
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same
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 number of people. The route of
railway
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 ranges from
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distance
 of 394km in
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London to
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distance
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Kyoto. The
railway
 in the city
Washington
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of Washington
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 DC opened in 1976 has
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distance
 of 126km but only carries 144
passenger
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 per year,
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 seems to be the lowest
distance to people
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 ratio. The newest among the six was
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Los Angeles with only 28km
carring
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carrying
caring
 50
millions
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million
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of
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people. A
trends
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 was noticed from the table, the
lastest
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railway
 has the
distance
 of route in decreasing order
upto
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up to
 1976. The Paris and Tokyo caries
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 huge amount of
passenger
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passengers
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. There were mainly the record of
railway
 established in 1900's .
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Kyoto and Los Angeles carried nearly 50
millions
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million passengers
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passenger
 and had
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distance
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proportion of 2:1 respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words railway, passenger, distance, km with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inaugurated
  • passenger throughput
  • network extensiveness
  • utilization rate
  • infrastructure
  • capacity
  • comparative analysis
  • disparity
  • ridership
  • underutilized
  • commuter density
  • historical significance
  • relatively recent
  • well-established
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