The graph below shows the average daily spend of three categories of international visitors to New Zealand from 1997 to 2017.

The graph below shows the average daily spend of three categories of international visitors to New Zealand from 1997 to 2017.
The line chart illustrates how three types of worldwide tourists (
business
, holiday and relatives) spent their average time in New Zealand between 1997 and 2017.
Overall
, spending amounts of all categories decreased significantly over the period. At the start of the period,
business
cost
was the maximum but it was replaced by vacation
cost
.
However
, the average
cost
for relatives was the lowest all over the time. In 1997, expenditure per day for work, holidays and meeting up with friends or relatives were respectively lower than 250$, 200$ and 120$ which grew rapidly in 2000. In 2001, average spending for
business
was peak
whereas
vacation was in 2003.
In contrast
, the
cost
of visiting friends
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decreased gradually, but
rest
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two fluctuated from 2004 to the end of the period.
However
, in 2010,
travelers
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spent more money on holidays than on
business
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Also
, in 2017, people spent money on vacation rather than
business
purposes.
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  • average daily spend
  • categories
  • international visitors
  • New Zealand
  • increased
  • holiday visitors
  • business visitors
  • education visitors
  • consistently
  • higher
  • significant increase
  • 20-year period
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