Cities are becoming more and more congested and polluted as the number of private cars increases. What are the advantages and disadvantages of owning a car?

Nowadays , countries are becoming more crowded than before and
as a result
of
this
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the number of cars used in
this
world has increased
therefore
also
the contamination increases . There are many drawbacks and benefits point from
this
.
Moreover
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essay will discuss the results of
this
and
also
the advantages and disadvantages of owning a
car
. Carbon dioxide increases with the use of cars or any type of transportation . That means that cars produce By-products when burning fuels to start working. As
result
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of
this
, the earth has started suffering from toxic chemicals .
For instance
,
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every five people one dies from carbon dioxide
therefore
, scientific researchers try to find solutions to solve
this
problem as soon as possible .
Moreover
, China's researchers have been starting research that focuses on producing green Hydrogen which is green fuel which means that it does not produce any type of contamination .
Therefore
,
this
research had success in saving community
life
.
This
is only one drawback of owning a
car
.
In contrast
, there are many pros to getting a
car
, one of the most
benefit
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, is that a
car
makes our
life
easier . Looking in more detail in our lives if we do not have a
car
we will not be able to travel , go to school or work , and our activities will be
with
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limiting if we do not have a
car
.
For example
, in poverty countries , there is a man called Ahmad and he has 3 children all of them in school,
while
he works the school time for his children ends, so the children need a bus to back home but because they live in poverty country so they do not have
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to do it only sit and wait , in another
life
if you do not have work your
life
will be stop for a moment . In conclusion, as there are many advantages
as
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a
car
makes
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our
life
easier there are
also
tremendous disadvantages to getting a new
car
as the world becomes more Polluted .
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • schedule flexibility
  • privacy
  • commute
  • environmental pollution
  • traffic congestion
  • maintenance costs
  • fuel costs
  • stress
  • crowded areas
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