You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter • correct the information in the article • explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information • suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to discuss an article that was recently published in your travel magazine about my town, Brampton. It states that the entire population in the city belongs to the Punjabi community, which is misleading because much like Toronto and Mississauga, Brampton is culturally diverse.

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approximately one-third of the population is Punjabi, the place still has a significant proportion of residents from other ethnicities.

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, it is crucial to provide accurate statistics because it may deter people from other cultural backgrounds from purchasing a home in

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area. As I live here, I can firmly say that all cultures are welcomed and respected in Brampton.

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is a great place because people from many different backgrounds live here together. We all get along, enjoy our own cultures, and work together to make our hometown a good place to live. To address

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issue, I kindly request that the editorial should be republished with correct information so that readers are aware of the actual situation. To avoid similar situations in the future, my suggestion for the magazine's editor is to proofread every article and verify that all the data is obtained from reputable and reliable sources. Thank you for your attention, and I look forward to seeing the updated article. Yours faithfully, Navdeep Tura

turanavdeepThu Jan 09 2025

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suitable writing tone

Ensure that the tone remains consistent and appropriately formal throughout the letter.

complete response

While the letter covers the necessary points, providing more specific examples or details might enhance the completeness.

logical structure

The letter follows a logical structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion.

single idea per paragraph

Well-organized paragraphs that each address a specific aspect of the task.

greeting and closing

A clear greeting and closing, enhancing the formality and coherence of the letter.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

219 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Rectify
Misrepresentation
Tourism
Editor
Credibility
Accuracy
Local heritage
Fact-checking
Repercussions
Counteractive measures
Publishing ethics
Clarification
Factual error
Misconception
Authenticity

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