The line chart shows average attendance at the cinema among various age groups in the Great Britain from 1984 to 2000.

The line chart shows average attendance at the cinema among various age groups in the Great Britain from 1984 to 2000.
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The line graph illustrates the average
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the cinema among
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of four age categories in the United Kingdom of Great Britain, in the period between 1984 and 2000.
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, over the span of 16 years, most people who visited cinema theatres were adolescents,
while
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the minority of cinema-lovers were adults.
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the data, cinemas were most preferred by the group of people of 15-24 age, reaching a maximum of 60%, in 1999.
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, they were not enough popular among youngsters in 1984, bottoming out at about 18 per cent. It is
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worth mentioning that residents under 14 were
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interested in watching films, hitting a high of 40% in 1997 and a low of 10% in 1984. As can be seen from the diagram, adults from 25 to over 30 did not have a big craving for
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, but comparing both groups, citizens under 35 prevailed, reaching 39% in 1997. As for the elder ones, the majority of the group, 15%, visited the place in 2000.
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