Social media is gradually replacing in-person face to face contact with many people worldwide. Do the benefits of social media outweigh the disadvantages?

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is no doubt
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social
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people
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will discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of the social
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and
also
my thoughts.
Firstly
,
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sucessful
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successful
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aborad
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abroad
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people
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in past it was very
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difficult
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to
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connect but social
media
give an
opporunity
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opportunity
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family members who are living very apart from us and it is good way to connect with them .
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,
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are many social
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media
platform
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platforms
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which give us
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range of amenities to make new friends.
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not have to go outside
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any classes or for the interview they can do it at home on
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apps like
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or meeting
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meeting
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with
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many
people
as now
people
prefer to call or send text to
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people
on
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special
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occasion
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rather
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meeting in person
and
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also
effect
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the
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relationships.
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Furthermore
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young adults are spending too much time on
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social
media
apps and becoming
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to them
as well as
not giving time to family.
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adults are making friends worldwide rather the neighbors which could
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to less social
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interaction
.
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media
give a wide platform to everyone in the world but it
reduce
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the
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interaction
interactions
between
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people
and
also
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relation
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relationships
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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