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The pie chart illustrates which transport use more often in Edmonton, with the table provides reason using of car.

The pie chart illustrates which transport use more often in Edmonton, with the table provides reason using of car.
#transport #edmonton #reason #car
The pie chart illustrates which
transport
use
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is used
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 more often in Edmonton, with the table
provides
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providing
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reason
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reasons
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using
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 of
car
. In general, close to
one half
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one-half
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using
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use
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 a
car
 in comparison with other
transports
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transport
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, and the
reason
 is
commute
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the commute
a commute
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 to work. It is clear from the pie chart that
car
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the car
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 is rated as a popular
transport
 among the majority of all
transport
, with a hefty 45 per
cent
 from four
transport
.
However
, the Light Rail Transit (LRT) is on the second level, which
is takes
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one third
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one-third
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 in
this
 chart.
By contrast
, the pattern is the complete reverse when it comes to
bus
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buses
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 and
taxi
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taxis
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, people used a tiny minority (10 per
cent
). As can be seen from the table, the
reason
 why people
using
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use
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 the
car
 in
city
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the city
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, only fifteen per
cent
used
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use
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for
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it for
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 leisure activities and shopping,
whereas
 the average for all
reason
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reasons
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 in
this
 table is a hefty 40 per
cent
. People commute to work every day, so it is the most popular
reason
 why
car
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the car
a car
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 is used, it takes just over one half.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words transport, reason, car, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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