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The pie chart illustrates which transport use more often in Edmonton, with the table provides reason using of car.

The pie chart illustrates which transport use more often in Edmonton, with the table provides reason using of car.
The pie chart illustrates which
transport
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use
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is used
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 more often in Edmonton, with the table
provides
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providing
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reason
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reasons
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using
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 of
car
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. In general, close to
one half
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using
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use
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 a
car
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 in comparison with other
transports
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transport
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, and the
reason
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 is
commute
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the commute
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 to work. It is clear from the pie chart that
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car
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the car
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 is rated as a popular
transport
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 among the majority of all
transport
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, with a hefty 45 per
cent
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 from four
transport
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.
However
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, the Light Rail Transit (LRT) is on the second level, which
is takes
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one third
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 in
this
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 chart.
By contrast
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, the pattern is the complete reverse when it comes to
bus
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buses
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 and
taxi
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taxis
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, people used a tiny minority (10 per
cent
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). As can be seen from the table, the
reason
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 why people
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use
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 the
car
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 in
city
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the city
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, only fifteen per
cent
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used
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use
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for
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it for
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 leisure activities and shopping,
whereas
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 the average for all
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reason
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reasons
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 in
this
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 table is a hefty 40 per
cent
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. People commute to work every day, so it is the most popular
reason
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 why
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car
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the car
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 is used, it takes just over one half.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words transport, reason, car, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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