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The bar chart lower shows information about the United Kingdom's age population the amount of 1985 between 2035

The bar chart lower shows information about the United Kingdom's age population the amount of 1985 between 2035
The graph lower shows information about the United Kingdom's age population the amount of 1985 between 2035 We can see in 1985 all of
countries
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the countries
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 were almost the same. the
different
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 is only a couple of percent, Wales is
a
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the
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 leader with 16%. In future,
at
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in
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 2035
also
Linking Words
 wales will be in
a
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apply
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first position with 26%.Only England and
Norther
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Northern
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 Ireland are similar. Wales
at
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apply
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1985 between 2035 is
also
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 the
most
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apply
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oldest
countries
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country
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 in the
UK's
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UK
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.the
most
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apply
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youngest is both the same way
Northern
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in Northern
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 Ireland
England
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and England
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. In general,
UK's
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the UK's
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 nations in 50 years grow up
at
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by
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 10%, but Scotland was one of youngest
will
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and will
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 be one of the oldest.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 89%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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