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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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that
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the allocation of weekly
familes
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families
family
 budgets in
a
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one country in two different years(1968, 2018).
Overall
, as can be seen from the graph
that
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families spent the largest portion of their
enarning
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earnings
earning
 on
food
 in 1968, but
leisure
occpied
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occupied
occupies
 the largest portion
in
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of
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 the household spent weekly
slaries
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salaries
series
. In 1968,
food
 took the largest
reatio
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ratio
（35%), which was almost five times the
poration
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portion
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 of
leisure
 spent by the
country
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country's
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 household weekly
income
. Over the following 50 years,
however
,
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the
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food
 spent figure fell by approximately 17%,
whereas
leisure
 spent
rise
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 by about
similar
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a similar
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 amount , which became
to
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the largest spent occupied the
familes
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family
 weekly
income
 in 2018.
Then
leisure
beacame
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became
 the
houshold
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household
in come
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income
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 spent leader with weekly
slaries
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salaries
series
 reaching around 23%, and housing
was
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overtook
the
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food
 spent , which increased from 10%(1968) to around 19% in 2018.
By
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other
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the other
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hands
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, there were four items of
families
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families'
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income
 spent that decreased or
remain
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remained
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 stable between 1968 and 2018. Fuel and power, clothing and foot,
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and persomal
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persomal
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personal
 good all declined between 1968 and 2018, from about 6%， 10%,
7
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and 7
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%, to 4%, 5%,
4
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and 4
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% respectively. Precisely speaking, household goods
reamin
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remain
remained
 stable at approximately 8%
between
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during
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this
 period., and transport spent in the
families
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family's
families'
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 weekly
income
 increased by 7% to
aboout
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about
 14
at the end
 of
period
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the period
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, leisure, income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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