The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with date opened, kilometres or route and passenger numbers per year in millions.
The table illustrates the six networks from different cities as regards their age, length,
passenger
number who Correct word choice
and passenger
using
it yearly.
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use
Overall
, the oldest underground routes
in all networks was Fix the agreement mistake
route
London
city route and in Correct article usage
the London
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of Fix the agreement mistake
terms
the
passengers, Correct article usage
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Tokyo
is
the greatest Verb problem
has
usage
while
London
again accounts for the longest distance of the network.
In more detail, the newest group of routes include
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including
London
, Paris
and Tokyo
are have a significant number of the
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distance
and users by Fix the agreement mistake
distances
the
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apply
By
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apply
Tokyo
, it
is certainly the most used, with 1927 million Correct pronoun usage
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passenger
per year and almost over 50 Fix the agreement mistake
passengers
percents
of Fix the agreement mistake
percent
Tokyo
systems usage
in Paris
and
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apply
London
is
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has
less passenger
than Fix the agreement mistake
fewer passengers
Paris
, with under a
half Correct article usage
apply
size
of Correct article usage
the size
Paris
usage
while
There are the most distance, with 394 kilometers.
Meanwhile, the oldest group have a lower number of usage
and length of routes. By the
Los Angeles network is the newest, having opened in 2001 Change preposition
The
and
The second new system is Kyoto launched in 1981 which there Correct word choice
apply
also
are shortest with 11 kilometers of route.Submitted by chaoweikevin on
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