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Some people say that drug companies have a responsibility to spend money on researching medicines that will help people in poorer countries. Others say the main responsibility of drug companies is to make money. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Some people argued that
drug
companies
 should invest their money
on
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 medical
research
 and
drug
 discovery to address health issues in developing countries,
while
 others suggested that prioritizing their profitability should be their main focus.
Personally
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 I can understand the two opposing points of view and it is a controversial issue which deserves an in-depth discussion. On the one hand, it is undeniable that
drug
companies
 are part of an industry
that is
 characterized by high risk and high reward. Perhaps the most recent example was the introduction of the mRNA vaccine after the outburst of
pandemic
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. The stocks of the
companies
 rocketed, leading to profits for investors worldwide.
Although
drug
companies
 bring many benefits
for
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 shareholders through earning money, I believe that
it
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they
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 can do more for the general public and
further
 improve the quality of life in poorer areas.
On the other hand
, I share the concerns of people who think that pharmaceutical
companies
 should shoulder the responsibility of investing in medical
research
 and
drug
 discovery. It is a big concern that most of the
research
 institutes and laboratories doing basic
research
 in Taiwan are unable to obtain enough
fundings
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. The cooperation between industry and academia is of utmost importance, as
drug
 development relies on the basic study of molecular pathways and immune responses.
Furthermore
, the development and marketing of drugs often involve patenting
drug
 recipes and techniques, which
lead
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 to the high prices of medical resources
that
is
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are
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 undoubtedly a huge hindrance for poor people.
Therefore
, I believe that publishing
drug
 components and techniques will definitely improve health concerns in developing countries. In conclusion,
while
 earning money is indeed desirable for
companies
 worldwide, investing in medical
research
 may benefit the health of all mankind.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • corporate social responsibility
  • sustainability
  • innovate
  • profitable
  • humanitarian
  • financial health
  • incentivizing
  • neglected diseases
  • ethical implications
  • exclusive rights
  • accessible
  • navigate challenges
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