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Some people think only best students should be rewarded, while others think we should reward students who make progress.Discuss these two points and give your opinion.

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There is an
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 debate regarding, which type of
students
 should be rewarded. There are divided opinions, A group of individuals have argued that only the best
students
 should be rewarded,
however
,
other
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others
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 have
counter claimed
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counterclaimed
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 that
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students
 who make progress should be rewarded. Prior to my stance, both
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viewpoints would be
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explanation
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. Discussing the former
view
, that only
best
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students
 should be rewarded,
this
 can be said because the best
students
 have worked really hard to achieve and are usually worthy of getting
appreciation
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 their work , by appreciating them, they would get motivated and they would continue with the good work,
while
 other
students
 who don't work hard would
also
 get motivated.
However
, the proponents have their own point of
view
 like, they say that
,
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 other
students
 who make progress should be rewarded, because these people are trying really hard to be among the best
students
, so appreciating them in any possible would encourage them more, and they would feel that they are going on
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 path.
To sum up
 and offer my position, I support
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later
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view
, because in the former
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,
students
 who are trying their level best are appreciated, and everyone cannot be
best
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 but
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at least
 they are trying so
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importance should be given to them
also
, which would make them really happy.
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