The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.

The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and

the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.
The maps illustrate how a
school
site is planned to be developed over a 20-year period.
Overall
, there will be extensive developments with
regards
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of buildings, facilities and roads in the
school
site, and the number of students will
also
increase significantly. In 2004, there was only one car park to the west of the site where the main entrance to the
school
was located. There were
also
two
school
buildings, accommodating 600 students altogether, separated by a path running from the main entrance to the sports field in the east. The
school
was surrounded by woodland in the north, south and east. There are plans to increase the number of students served by the
school
by 400 in 2024.
As a result
, a new
school
building will replace the old sports field, and the two original buildings are going to be joined together. The old path will
then
connect these to the new building number 3, no longer running to the main entrance.
Furthermore
, a part of the woodland in the east is planned to be deforested and replaced by a new car park
as well as
a new, smaller sports field.
Finally
, a new road will be paved passing south of the
school
building, which will connect the two car parks.
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