The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.

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The maps illustrate how a

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site is planned to be developed over a 20-year period.

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, there will be extensive developments with

regards

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construction

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of buildings, facilities and roads in the

school

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site, and the number of students will

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increase significantly. In 2004, there was only one car park to the west of the site where the main entrance to the

school

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was located. There were

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two

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buildings, accommodating 600 students altogether, separated by a path running from the main entrance to the sports field in the east. The

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was surrounded by woodland in the north, south and east. There are plans to increase the number of students served by the

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by 400 in 2024.

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, a new

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building will replace the old sports field, and the two original buildings are going to be joined together. The old path will

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connect these to the new building number 3, no longer running to the main entrance.

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, a part of the woodland in the east is planned to be deforested and replaced by a new car park

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a new, smaller sports field.

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, a new road will be paved passing south of the

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building, which will connect the two car parks.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

215 words

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The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.

Advertising is becoming more and more common in everyday life. Is it a positive or negative development? You should write at least 250 words.

The government’s investment in arts, music and theater is a waste of money. Government should invest these funds in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

In many country, women are allowed to take maternity leave during the first month after birth of the newborn. Do you think that the advantages of the maternity leave outweigh its disadvantages?

Despite better access to education, some adults are not able to read or write. What are the main disadvantages of this? What can be done to solve this problem?

Nowadays, there is a trend that reports in the media focus on problems and emergencies rather than positive development. Some people think it is harmful to individuals and to society. Dương,