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Fewer and fewer people today write by hand using pen, paper or brush. What are the reasons? Is this a positive and negative development?

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The bar graph provides information about siv various
nations
 namely the US,
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Germany
,
UK
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, Japan,
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Netherland
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 and Sweden developed
nations
 to developing
nations
in
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 2008 to 2010. To give an over, it summarised that, the USA was
highest
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 developing
nations
 as compared to other
nations
.
Nevertheless
, Sweden depicted
lowest
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 proportion of data. To commence with, it was observed that, in 2008 the USA emarked around 21
billion
 and during the next year it
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declined and reached 20. Even though, in 2010, again it boosted another 3
billion
.
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 Germany began with 10 and after
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 it analysed
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upwardtrend
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upward trend
 till 2010. The UK and Japan both showed
same
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 trend throughout the whole period.
Furthermore
,
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the Netherland
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Netherland
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Netherlands
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econmy
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economy
 started
with
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at
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 below 8
billion
 and it
was
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rose slightly
1
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to 1
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billion
 and reached 9. Again it declined minimally less than 1
billion
.
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, Sweden started with below 7
billion
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levelled off in 2010.
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