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In some countries, increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a results of eating too much fast foods. Therefore, government should force higher taxes in this kind of foods. Do you agree/disagree

#countries #people #health #results #foods #government #force #taxes
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 of towns and cities in certain
area
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 and
also
prediction
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 about future
population
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populations
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. To give an overview, it was remarkably
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tha
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that
, The Latin American
population
 was the highest as compared to other cities
whereas
 Asia depicted the lowest
population
 throughout the whole period. To commence with,
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 world, it observed that in 1950
population
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 began
with
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 30 and after that, it escalated around 29 and reached 49 in 2000.
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, it again will
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number
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 of the
population
nearly
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 11.
Moreover
, Africa analysed the lowest 10 and it
was
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dramatically rose in 2000 and in future, it will
be reach
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 above 50.
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,
Asian
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population
just
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 above 10 and it suddenly
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 and reached around 39 in 2000. The future prediction of
this
 will be nearly 58. Latin America embarked with 41 and it dramatically increased and reached 70 in 2000 after that, it will
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 around 80 in 2030.
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