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In future all cars, busses and trcuks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passangers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

#future #cars #busses #trcuks #driverless #people #vehicles #passangers
There is no second thought that in recent times all cars,
busses
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 and trucks would be automated and there won't be any need
of
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driver
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a driver
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. I personally believe that there are more disadvantages than advantages. In
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detail,
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 analysis with
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is
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 in
following
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 paragraphs.  The foremost disadvantage is that
,
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 the majority
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of labourers
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 who are struggling in
life
 and have their source of income by driving
vehicles
,
these
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people
 would be left jobless,
unemployed
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, so for these
people
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people,
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driverless
vehicles
 are like a curse and
after
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 they have to find a whole new profession and start from scratch , which is not at all a good sign for society. Adding to
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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, a major
dissadvantage
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disadvantage
 is that the safety of many
life
 would be put in danger
,
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 because a
driverless
 car,
buss
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bus
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 or
a
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truck works on the principle of artificial intelligence
wihch
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which
 is not safe and if the system fails the passengers and the
people
 travelling on the streets would be in danger and anyone could get hurt which is very
riscky
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risky
.
However
, there is
good
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 side
also
, like
due to
driverless
vehicles
 , some
people
 would get comfort and
it
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with
this
 technology
life
 would get easier,
and
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if the
vehicles
 become
driverless
 the maintenance of the vehicle would be less and the fuel efficiency would
also
 be maximum as the vehicle would move with proper technique. Concluding, we can say that
the
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life
would
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 get easier yet
risckier
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richer
, and sometimes even more
comlpex
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complex
 for some
people
, so there are disadvantages more than advantages.
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