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You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost.

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to you today to let you know that I would be happy to participate in the seminar organized in Spain next month.
Therefore
 , I need more information concerning the exact date since there is no specific information on the website.
Moreover
, the timing of the seminar is a game changer for me owing to my actual health condition which does not allow me to stay up late at night.
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, I wish to have more details about the program
hence
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that I
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 am going to have the best outcome from it. To reiterate, I would like to receive an invoice listing the cost of accommodation
as well as
 the choices I have in terms of hotels and restaurants near the area. Thank you for your consideration. Yours faithfully. Katty.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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