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Computer are being used more and more in education. Some people say this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, as the generation is moving ahead and people are getting advanced, the
students
 have started using
computers
 for studies. So both
positive
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 side and negative side are discussed in
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 my opinion is given.
Firstly
, some people say that using
computers
 for education purposes is good, they say
this
 because
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computers
 now are the hub of sources and hub of information. On
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the internet
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 a
computer
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 a person can get any sort of information so,
this
 could be really beneficiary for the
students
 to gather more and more information and new things online only, and many times free of cost, another reason for using
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computer
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 is that
,
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 in future everything is going to work on
computers
, so if the
students
 know the
computers
 very well, that knowledge could be quite
helpfull
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helpful
.
However
, using
computers
 by
students
 could turn out bad
also
, like when a computer is given to a
student
 who is immature, and if he/she is introduced to the bad content which is everywhere online,
then
 the
student
instead
 of studying good things , he/she starts learning something which should be not introduced to them, that would turn out bad, like if a
student
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 age starts learning how to hack,
then
 he/she would be on
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 path. Concluding that,
according to
 me there are more
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negatives about
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computers
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than positive, and we cannot generalise for every
student
, because each person is different, so
students
 should use
computers
 but after knowing the consequences it has.
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Task Response
The essay addresses both views, but the response lacks depth and thorough analysis. Ensure that you provide detailed arguments for both sides and support them with relevant evidence and examples.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present, but the overall organization of the essay could be improved. Use transitional words and phrases to create a better flow between paragraphs and ideas. Also, pay attention to paragraph development for better coherence and cohesion.

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