Some people believe the main purpose of education is to prepare individuals to be useful to society. Others say the purpose of education is to achieve personal ambitions. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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society. Some
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. In the others’ opinion teaching is for personal intentions. In my opinion, schooling is to reach personal aims. On the one hand, nowadays some
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. The reason
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schools.
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, “how to act in public” is one of the most crucial
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many
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learn manners in public.
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, many
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have completely different opinions about
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schools and universities can lead
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to attain their goals. There are so many
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around the world who get
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for their future. Because
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future
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for human beings.
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education
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can aid
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foreign countries and learn
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, cultures.
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individuals to find jobs easily. In conclusion, for some
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’s perspectives getting
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to teach
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how to act in general public,
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is motivation for the
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of
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is more likely a key to
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targets for
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • preparation
  • beneficial
  • society
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • civic responsibility
  • active participation
  • social initiatives
  • societal issues
  • solutions
  • specialized professions
  • personal growth
  • self-fulfillment
  • passions
  • interests
  • potential
  • talents
  • job prospects
  • financial stability
  • balance
  • meaningful
  • foundation
  • emphasis
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