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The bar chart below shows US seafood imports between 2002 and 2022 and the forecast for 2032. The pie chart shows the geographical structure of these imports in 2022.

The bar chart below shows US seafood imports between 2002 and 2022 and the forecast for 2032. The pie chart shows the geographical structure of these imports in 2022.
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The graphs illustrate the amount of
seafood
 imports in the US during the period of 2002 to 2022 and the prediction for 2032,
along with
 the global distribution of the imports in the
year
 2022.
Overall
, the volume of imported
seafood
 has seen a steady growth through the years studied,
the
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 most amount of it coming from two Asian countries China, and Thailand in the
year
 2022. During 2002 the US spent just above 5
billion
 dollars
seafood
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on seafood
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 from abroad,
expenditure
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an expenditure
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 which saw an increase almost two times its initial cost reaching 10
billion
 in 2012 and ultimately peaking in 2022 with a massive increase of 10
billion
 more, reaching the value of 20
billion
 in 2022. Despite
this
 incredible
growth
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growth,
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 it´s predicted that in the
year
2032
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2032,
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 the United States of America will lower investment in
seafood
 decreasing slightly to around 17
billion
. Globally, more than half of all
seafood
 imported into the US in the
year
 2022 originated from China and Thailand, with it being 28% and 23% respectively. Canada constitutes 16% of the imported consumables and the
last
 30%
coming
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comes
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 from countries like Indonesia, Vietnam, Ecuador and others.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words seafood, year, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend analysis
  • Forecast
  • Imports
  • Seafood
  • Geographical distribution
  • Dominant market
  • Sustainability
  • Trade agreements
  • Consumer preferences
  • Global events
  • Consumption patterns
  • Source country
  • Economic impact
  • Aquaculture
  • Wild-caught
  • Exporting nations
  • Trade balance
  • Marine ecosystem
  • Fishery products
  • Supply chain
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