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The pie charts illustrate the percentage of world forest and timber in five different nations namely, South Africa, Africa, Asia, Europe and North America.

The pie charts illustrate the percentage of world forest and timber in five different nations namely, South Africa, Africa, Asia, Europe and North America.
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The
pei
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pie
 charts present the proportion of
world
forest
 and
timber
 in Asia,
Africa
 and three other nations
such
 as Europe, South
Africa
 and North
America
.
Overall
, the
proportional
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proportion
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 of
africa
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Africa
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 was
greatest
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the greatest
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 in the
world
forest
 but has
least
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the least
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 amount
to
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of
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timber
. Europe has occupied approximately equal amount of space in both the diagram shown.
The
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Africa
 and North
America
has
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 nearly
equally
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equal
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 percentage
around
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of around
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 26%
in
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of
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 the
world
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world's
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forest
whereas
 in
case
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the case
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 of
timber
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timber,
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 the ratio
of
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between
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 North
America
 and
Africa
 observed was greater than 3:1.
The
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Europe and South
America
 has 20% and 23% of
timber
 and 18% and 16% of
world
forest
 respectively. The range of
timber
 was greater
with
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at
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 21%, as only 13% was shown in the
world
forest
.
The
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Asia has almost equal
part
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parts
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 of both
world
forest
 and
timber
 with 14% of
world
forest
 and 18% of
timber
.
The
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North
America
 was dominant in
timber
as well as
 in the
world
forest
.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words world, forest, timber, africa, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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