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The chart shows the first-year university students and the subjects they took by gender in 1980

The chart shows the first-year university students and the subjects they took by gender in 1980
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The bar chart above illustrates information about the academic subject freshmen chose based on sex in 1980.
Overall
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, it is observable that medicine, law,
languages
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 and
arts
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 had more female
students
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 than male but male is more dominant in sciences and maths. It can
also
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 be seen that sciences,
languages
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 and
arts
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 had the biggest differences
while
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 there was just a small gap in law and maths. In 1980, medicine had
the
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 male
students
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 number of almost 2600
while
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 there were about 4100 female
students
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 in
this
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 field. The gender gap was bigger in
languages
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 and
arts
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, there were approximately 4200 and 4600
female
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females
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 in
languages
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 and
arts
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 respectively but there were only 1600
male
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males
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 in
languages
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 and 2100
male
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males
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 in
arts
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.
In contrast
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,
law
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the law
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 had the smallest
different
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difference
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 between
two
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the two
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 genders with 1900
male
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males
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 and just under 2000
female
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females
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. Looking at the remaining
statistic
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statistics
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, sciences had around 4300 male
students
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 which was almost equal to the number of female
students
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 in language and more than 2000 female
students
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 which was
also
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 almost the same
of
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as
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 male
students
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 number in
arts
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. Maths had the second smallest gap with 3100 and 2800 for male
students
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 and female
students
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 correspondingly.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words languages, arts, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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