‘It is the job of governments and companies to deal with the huge environmental problems which we face. Individuals on their own can do little or nothing’. What is your opinion about this statement?

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Nowadays these environmental
problems
are
acting
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playing
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a huge role
in
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apply
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globaly
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globally
global
.
Governaments
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Governments
and companies are responsible
to search
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for searching
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solutions
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for solutions
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for
thses
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these
problems
due to
most of the
problems
began
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begin
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as a result
of their
behavior
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behaviour
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.
Therefore
, individuals have a small role
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in
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for
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in
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this
consequence.
This
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essay I will
discusse
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discuss
the reasons for
this
phenomenon. Government and companies are back born of the country,
therefore
, their
behavior
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behaviour
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will impact on the
counrty
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country
mainly. Many authorities and
business
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businesses
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harm the environment because most of them do not worry about
the
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apply
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pollution, they target only their profit and task
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achievement
.
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, most
of
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the
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garment factories throw their dye and waste
product
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products
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to
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into
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rivers and some hotels throw their garbage
to
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into
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the sea. Some waste products
harmful
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are harmful
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for
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to
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coral, fish, and water.
Similarly
,
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
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is aslo
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aslo
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also
responsible for
this
situation.
Moreover
,
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is
a
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huge damage
for
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to
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the eniviroment
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eniviroment
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environment
,
most
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and most
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of our future generations will have to face a lot of difficulties because of
this
pollutions
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pollution
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. At the same time, individuals
also
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are also
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responsible for
this
matter but their proportion is
miner
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miners
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for
this
issue. Most
of
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people
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people are
people were
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aware of
this
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these
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environmental
problems
and they have
self
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a
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decipline
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discipline
for
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to
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protect
it
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them
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. So, I have
personal
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a personal
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experience
for
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of
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this
, I closely know a
falimy
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family
facility
, they do not throw any harmful
product
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products
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to
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into
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the enviroment
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enviroment
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environment
without
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recycling
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it
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them
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. Always they put their garbage in the correct bin and some waste
product
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products
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they use to make compost
from
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apply
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. So, Individuals
not
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are not
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the main
charator
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characters
for
this
problem. In conclusion, we all have a responsible to protect
our
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apply
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nature,
therwise
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otherwise
we will not have a future. But most of the
goverments
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governments
government
and companies run behind their profit. So, they do not think about the environment.
Their
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the major party for
this
issue and they are the only authority
can
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that can
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find solutions for
this
matter.
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