The availability of entertainment such as video games on handheld devices is harmful to individuals and to the society they live in. To what extent do you agree and disagree?
Nowadays, with technological advancement many
devices
like smartphone
and tablets Fix the agreement mistake
smartphones
act
as source
of enjoyment for many Fix the agreement mistake
sources
individuals
. My essay will explain demerits
of Correct article usage
the demerits
this
approach such
as lack
of focus in studies among children and Correct article usage
the lack
promotion
of Correct article usage
the promotion
sedentary
lifestyle Correct article usage
a sedentary
due to
less physical activities
. Fix the agreement mistake
activity
Also
, explain one merit which acts like a stimulant to change mood among individuals
.
To begin
with, there are lots of features in smart devices
which attract many individuals
to play online games and grab attention
of many students resulting in Add an article
the attention
indulge
in Replace the word
them indulging
videogames
. All these facilities lead to Correct your spelling
video games
Correct article usage
a wastage
wastage
of Replace the word
waste
time
and divert focus from studies and important aspects in
their lives. Change preposition
of
For example
, survey
conducted by educational bodies indicatedAdd an article
a survey
,
Correct word choice
that, majority
majority
of school goers are losing Correct article usage
the majority
values
in terms of educational Fix the agreement mistake
value
standard
and Fix the agreement mistake
standards
also
observed lack
of attention problem among them Correct article usage
a lack
due to
overindulgence in online videogames
. Correct your spelling
video games
Also
, observed that individuals
are not utilizing their potential due this
reason as they should Change preposition
to this
also
require
to spend Wrong verb form
be required
time
in other important activities like physical exercise and yoga which help them to stay fit and healthy. All these parameters caries weight age
for growth prospective in terms of good fortune and health.
Even though there are many Correct your spelling
weightage
downside
Change to a plural noun
downsides
of
Change preposition
to
this
approach, if these devices
are utilize
in Wrong verb form
utilised
effective
manner Change the article
an effective
then
this
will help individuals
to carve out stress, boost mood from hectic busy schedule
and Fix the agreement mistake
schedules
also
act
as source
of entertainment. Add an article
a source
the source
For instance
, it is responsibility
of parents to give Add an article
the responsibility
devices
to their ward
for Fix the agreement mistake
wards
limited
Correct article usage
a limited
time
frame only so that they can enjoy their leisure time
. In addition
to this
, parental control is essential to overcome from
Change preposition
apply
this
issue. It is a choice of people how they deal with technological devices
. Over dependant
Add a hyphen
Over-dependant
of
these Change preposition
on
devices
leads to number
of issues many detrimental issues among students in Change the article
a number
the number
long
run.
Correct article usage
the long
To conclude
, technology devices
act
as double
edge sword, on the one hand, if it utilize in Correct article usage
a double
efficient
manner Change the article
an efficient
then
these act
as stress buster
to change Fix the agreement mistake
busters
Add an article
the mind
mind set
for Correct your spelling
mindset
certain
period of Add an article
a certain
time
, on the other hand
, if this
is uncontrollable then
over usage of these devices
to play videogames has many drawbacks to individual especially for students. Therefore
careful consideration must be taken by caretakers so that their wards
future will not impacted badly which have negative repercussion on society collectively.Change noun form
ward's
wards'
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Word Count
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A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.