The availability of entertainment such as video games on handheld devices is harmful to individuals and to the society they live in. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

Nowadays, with technological advancement many
devices
like
smartphone
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smartphones
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and tablets
act
as
source
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of enjoyment for many
individuals
. My essay will explain
demerits
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the demerits
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of
this
approach
such
as
lack
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the lack
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of focus in studies among children and
promotion
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the promotion
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of
sedentary
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a sedentary
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lifestyle
due to
less physical
activities
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activity
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.
Also
, explain one merit which acts like a stimulant to change mood among
individuals
.
To begin
with, there are lots of features in smart
devices
which attract many
individuals
to play online games and grab
attention
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the attention
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of many students resulting in
indulge
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them indulging
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in
videogames
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video games
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. All these facilities lead to
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a wastage
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wastage
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of
time
and divert focus from studies and important aspects
in
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their lives.
For example
,
survey
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conducted by educational bodies indicated
,
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that, majority
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majority
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the majority
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of school goers are losing
values
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value
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in terms of educational
standard
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standards
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and
also
observed
lack
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a lack
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of attention problem among them
due to
overindulgence in online
videogames
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video games
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.
Also
, observed that
individuals
are not utilizing their potential due
this
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reason as they should
also
require
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to spend
time
in other important activities like physical exercise and yoga which help them to stay fit and healthy. All these parameters caries
weight age
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for growth prospective in terms of good fortune and health. Even though there are many
downside
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of
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this
approach, if these
devices
are
utilize
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in
effective
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an effective
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manner
then
this
will help
individuals
to carve out stress, boost mood from hectic busy
schedule
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schedules
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and
also
act
as
source
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a source
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of entertainment.
For instance
, it is
responsibility
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the responsibility
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of parents to give
devices
to their
ward
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wards
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for
limited
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a limited
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time
frame only so that they can enjoy their leisure
time
.
In addition
to
this
, parental control is essential to overcome
from
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this
issue. It is a choice of people how they deal with technological
devices
.
Over dependant
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of
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these
devices
leads to
number
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a number
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of issues many detrimental issues among students in
long
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the long
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run.
To conclude
, technology
devices
act
as
double
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edge sword, on the one hand, if it utilize in
efficient
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an efficient
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manner
then
these
act
as stress
buster
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busters
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to change
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the mind
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mind set
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mindset
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for
certain
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a certain
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period of
time
,
on the other hand
, if
this
is uncontrollable
then
over usage of these
devices
to play videogames has many drawbacks to individual especially for students.
Therefore
careful consideration must be taken by caretakers so that their
wards
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future will not impacted badly which have negative repercussion on society collectively.
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