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Nowadays air pollution is becoming more serious. What are the causes of air pollution?

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Air
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 contamination is one of the most endangered problems which has a devastating effect on the planet and people as well.There are several reasons for the rising level of
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 pollution. The first reason is the emission from the factories, firms and industries.Those manufacturing units release untreated gases into the environment, which raises the concentration of carbon dioxide in the atmosphere, resulting in
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air
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 dirtiness.
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, the increasing use of private vehicles in urban areas
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 contributes to the growth of polluted
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. To be more specific, people tend to use motorbikes,
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 cars to travel, and those means of transport generate a huge amount of exhaust fumes.
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, the contaminated
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 is a consequence of natural disasters. Dust, gases coming from volcano eruptions, storms, earthquakes,
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and deforestation
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 are typical examples of catastrophic climate events which lead to the deteriorated quality of the atmosphere.
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, atmospheric deterioration can follow from various causes, and people should detect the solutions to tackle that serious problem.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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