You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter, • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction

about

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uncomfortable

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the uncomfortable

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conditions in

a the

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room where I live. It is a challenging task to manage time for work when someone lives with you

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the same place

hence

some issues

are

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have appeared. The main problem which I faced duo

due to

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arrangement is that my

collegue

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colleague

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makes

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a dreadful noise when I

try

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to resolve tasks which were assigned to me by my project manager. I have already had

painful

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experience

which

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related to

disscussing

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discussing

his behaviour

however

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didnt

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) find a decision.(resolution)

Additionaly

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, It harms my mental health.

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, I believe that

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terrible situation will be resolved, if the college provides us an

apportunity

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opportunity

to live separately. If is it possible I would prefer

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in a room on the second floor with a bathroom and a balcony. I would be grateful if you could help me. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Ignat Bern

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in additional
moreover
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for example
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although
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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

170 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

accommodation officer
roommate
share a room
living arrangement
difficult to work
noise levels
study environment
privacy concerns
alternative accommodation
single room
academic performance
well-being
respectfully request

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