You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter, • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefer
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to express my dissatisfaction
about
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with
uncomfortable
conditions in Correct article usage
the uncomfortable
a the
room where I live. It is a challenging task to manage time for work when someone lives with you Choose an article
a
the
at
the same place Change preposition
in
hence
some issues are
have appeared.
The main problem which I faced duo Unnecessary verb
apply
due to
this
arrangement is that my collegue
colleague always Correct your spelling
colleague
makes
a dreadful noise when I Wrong verb form
made
try
to resolve tasks which were assigned to me by my project manager. I have already had Wrong verb form
tried
painful
experience Add an article
a painful
which
related to Correct pronoun usage
apply
disscussing
his behaviour Correct your spelling
discussing
however
we don't
(grammatical error- Wrong verb form
didn't
didnt
) find a decision.(resolution) Correct your spelling
didn't
Additionaly
, It harms my mental health.
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Additionally
However
, I believe that this
terrible situation will be resolved, if the college provides us an apportunity
to live separately. If is it possible I would prefer Correct your spelling
opportunity
living
in a room on the second floor with a bathroom and a balcony. I would be grateful if you could help me.
I look forward to hearing from you.
Yours faithfully,
Ignat BernChange the verb form
to live
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main idea and is logically connected to the previous and following paragraphs.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
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- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite