Your friend has been offered a place on a course at the university where you studied. He/She would like your advice about finding a place to live.

Dear Mohit, How are you? Hope you are in good health and in high spirits. I am writing
this
letter to express my happiness that you have been offered a Business Communication course at Khalsa
College
. I know
this
course is highly recommended by our experts who have good knowledge in management studies and completing
this
course will give you ample opportunities for searching suitable job. I want to share my experience when I joined
this
college
three years ago, I lived near a guest house just opposite
this
college
as there were excellent apartments and a fully furnished flats system which
also
provided facilities of meals and they charged around eight thousand a month. If you are planning to stay near
this
college
, you can take advice from the
college
staff for an appropriate guest house
otherwise
, you can stay near to
college
where I stayed during my term in
this
college
as these guest houses are safe for
college
students. There are so many flats and apartments which are not safe to stay in as people nearby localities sometimes harsh to students
therefore
better to stay just near to
college
which gives you safety measures. Hope you find my suggestions suitable. Feel free to touch base with me in case
further
advice is required on
this
aspect. Best regards, Amandeep
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