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The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart shows the number of
British
Use synonyms
 Emigration who were chosen the place to go from 2004 to 2007.
Overall
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, Australia registers the largest figure of people selected in all 4 years, meanwhile, New Zealand and the USA record the smallest number for
this
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. In 2004, Approximately 41 thousand
of
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apply
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British
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 Emigration who came to Australia,
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that
Correct pronoun usage
which
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 is the largest figure
in
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of
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this
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 year. Spain is
a the
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a
the
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 second country in which
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British
Correct article usage
the British
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settle
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settled
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in
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apply
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, at around 35
percent
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per cent
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. New Zealand, USA and France has the same
that
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apply
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figure
by
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of
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 approximately 22
percent
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per cent
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. In 2005, France had
becam
Correct your spelling
become
became
the second favorite place for
British
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 emigration, at 33 %. In 2006, 55 perc

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words british with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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